Good chapter. I liked how all the various pieces in House's life started to fit together. Also, his identity confusion is always fascinating to read. I wonder if he will ever start thinking of himself as "Greg". I love this part.
My only problem with this chapter is that there is so much exposition and most of the dialogue comes at the end. Some dialogue exchanges at the beginning would help the pacing. Just my opinion. In all other ways, it's entertaining and all of the character voices are distinct and IC. Hope my comments aren't too "dry". I'm enjoying this tremendously and look forward to each installment!
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My only problem with this chapter is that there is so much exposition and most of the dialogue comes at the end. Some dialogue exchanges at the beginning would help the pacing. Just my opinion. In all other ways, it's entertaining and all of the character voices are distinct and IC. Hope my comments aren't too "dry". I'm enjoying this tremendously and look forward to each installment!