How interesting that during the story Pete becomes Greg, and not just because Nolan is referring him to that name. I'm going to go back and read the whole series, because this is just that good.
I'd eat Nolan's pancakes...I've never soured milk. Damn, James knows everything about cooking.
One notable feature of this story is that I'm perfectly comfortable with your using their first names. Usually that jumps out at me, but in the context of this story it makes perfect sense. As does the changing of POV depending on the scene.
![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
no subject
Date: 2015-09-21 02:42 pm (UTC)I'd eat Nolan's pancakes...I've never soured milk. Damn, James knows everything about cooking.
One notable feature of this story is that I'm perfectly comfortable with your using their first names. Usually that jumps out at me, but in the context of this story it makes perfect sense. As does the changing of POV depending on the scene.